Fic: Veracity. 1/1 - Mature People

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Title: Veracity
Author: Ky (Venom_69)
Fandom: Stargate: Atlantis
Category: Romance, angst
Pairing: John/Elizabeth
Rating: Mature People
Summary: Elizabeth can't really wrap her head around the idea that every time John disobeys one of her orders, it's simply because he wants to pants her.
Archive: My site. Anywhere else, sure, just let me know where so I can come visit.
Disclaimer: Don’t own them, never will. Promise to put them back in the state I found them. Song’s not mine either, that would be Alanis Morrisett’s “Won me over.”
Author’s notes: Written for the swficathon, specifically heimedall. I don’t usually write things and leave them on my Hard drive for long - I tend to re-read them later and decide that I hate them. It happened here, too, so many thanks to the beautiful valeria_sg_1 for the beta and endless supply of encouragement.
Date Completed: 02/10/06
Copyright © to Venom, 2006

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You’ve already won me over, in spite of me
And don’t be alarmed if I fall, head over feet
And don’t be surprised if I love you, for all that you are
I couldn’t help it,
It’s all your fault

You treat me like I’m a princess

***

Cross posted like a woman on crack!

Comments

[trialia]

Have to say, you know I'm a fan of your writing but this is quite possibly the best thing you've ever written, IMHO. *grin* Wonderful.

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you VERY much hon.

I'm glad you liked it. :)

[sarievenea.livejournal.com]

oh my god.

oh my god.

oh my god.

Don't 'cha hate it when you are totally execting more and the fic just...ends?

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Actually... I really do hate it when authors do that.

*g*

[ankareeda.livejournal.com]

WOW! *is speechless*

That was wonderful, but oh so sad. You broke my heart into million little pieces. I totally heart your AU John and Beth, you can't leave it there. And OMG our Liz & John... Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful! I wish there was more, because it's brilliant and so touching. Beautifully written!

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you - very much.

I must admit, I am tempted to write a sequel from John & Beth's POV... but I don't think I could do them any more justice.

Thank you again. :)

[ankareeda.livejournal.com]

You're welcome.

It’s me again. Sorry! *grins* I actually wanted to write you a more detailed feedback earlier, but I hadn’t time. Okay, where do I begin?! *scratches head*
First I’m still thinking about the whole story and your characters, I even discussed it with jr_moon, because I was soooooo touched by it. The emotional factor in that story is LIKE THAT BIG, because I nearly cried (and I never cry :P) at the beginning, when your AU John wanted to go out with our Elizabeth, because I knew (at least I thought so :P) why he wanted it.
And OMG, there are so many twists and things that just surprise you, when you think about further. I really love the fact, that when you read it again, you discover so much depth and hidden emotions. Your AU John is truly brilliant as well as your Beth, because ZOMG you love them both in an instant and you can understand, why they act so and so. But at the same time, they are still a mystery. Wonderful characterization!
Furthermore I think this story is completely sad, even though at the same time you ended both time lines happy in a way. But because this story is so tricky and emotional it’s just not happy. Every single person is hurt in a vein and I LOVE THAT FACT. *gggg* But I do love happy endings, I need them. :P
Your whole AU world has so much potential, true brilliance.
Sorry for my rambling, but I just wanted to let you know that I really, really, really love this story. Awesome!

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Feel free to ramble away, it's a high compliment!

I'm glad that you liked the characters - I wasn't at all comfortable with making Beth a 'battered woman' but it just sorta turned out that way. And General John is just how he came out, so I'm really pleased that it worked for you.

[jr-moon.livejournal.com]

That was a great read! More? *pokes*

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

And I'll think about it. :)

[billy-red-ocean.livejournal.com]

*thud*


wait...what do you mean with the end? I just started reading...

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Sorry chickey, that's all sheI wrote.

[agentcat47.livejournal.com]

I read this last night and ADORED it. Incredible, incredible, incredible work you've done here. You just blew me away. Really, really cool. I love that she wants to go back to that alternate reality but she liked it so much, and things were different in a good way. And then she's torn between the two...now that she's pregnant. Also, poor Beth! I love that you put in that in an alternate universe, people would have really crazy alternate jobs as well as different nicknames, or just names in general. Ronon and Teyla were both from Earth! Really cool. I'm putting this in my memories. I just saw the link for this again at sga_newsletter, but I actually originally got your link from john_elizabeth. Please, please keep writing stories.

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Hello!

Thank you, very much for your kind words.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I have to say, screwing with the characters in my own warped little way was fun.

The beauty of AU's - nothing is limited but our own imaginations.

Please, please keep writing stories.

I recently signed up to write 200 fics (For Stargate & Voyager), so there's little chance of that not happening!

[flowerbud2.livejournal.com]

Loved this story. Nicely done characterizations, good pacing. What a nice treat to read after a long day at work. Hope you will consider writing a sequel. I would love to know what happens next to both couples. BTW, I discovered the story through the John-Elizabeth ship LJ, as well.

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you - very much.

After everyone's kind words, I have to say that the thought of a sequel isn't quite as unappealing to me as it was a week ago!

[mylittleredgirl.livejournal.com]

Aaaaaargh!!!

I wasn't going to read it. I wasn't. For one, I was ASLEEP practically when I leaned over from bed and clicked "refresh" one last time. For two, I looked at the summary and was all "eh, random pr0n, it'll keep." And then I was all "OH MY GOD ALANIS MORISETTE WTF" and started having these twitchy flashbacks to high school and many many many other fanfics (mostly bad) including one of mine (very bad) from the late nineties with that song songficced in there... and I was totally not going to read it. Really.

And then I CLICKED THE LINK LIKE A FOOL.

AND STAYED UP FOR LIKE EVER READING YOUR TOTALLY AWESOME STORY.

Like, dude! I totally kept expecting this big letdown where someone broke into song at which point I could just give up and go to sleep, and it didn't happen, and was just crazily rentlessly good. I love eeeet. I've been thinking about it all day, because your AU John is so totally fan-tas-tic and such a tragic bitter romance dude, and it's so perfect. The way you twisted everything is so much fun. So much! But really, the emotional power of this was just unexpected and great.

And the ending... see, I know that was the challenge, and the weird thing is, the story doesn't need it. It was almost like a whole other story. I might even have liked it better without the surprisebaby ending (and I'm so glad you left the challenge prompts until the end to show us, thanks!).

But guh, I love your AU. Love it. Really, just love your AU John, and it's ALL YOUR FAULT that I am going to write sekrit fanfic about him now, because he's a fabulous character in the Tragic 19th Century Novel sense. I'm totally wowed by this story, and the complexity and depth you've managed to give your AU characters (even those we don't see much of, like Simon) in so little time. Rock on. *cheers*

[venom69.livejournal.com]

OK. Dude.

Can I have feedback hall of fame? You're so in it for this... Actually, you own Ky's Feedback Hall Of Fame as of now. *nod*

I'm glad that you clicked, even if it was only for Alanis at the start.

The chances of you finding anyone singing in my fics is slim to none... unless it's a parody. But I don't think i've put that in a parody yet... mmmm, ideas.

Thank you - very much - for everything you said. I have no words to express how much your comment rawks.

Don't mean to sound big headed, but I kinda love my AU John too. And if you write fic about him - which you are SO welcome to do - I vote that you post it so i can read it and squee.

As a little sidenote, your fic is the first I ever sought out in this fandom. (I was sucked into Atlantis Beta'ing p0rn for someone. Same way I was suckered into NCIS, damnit. Don't ever let it be said that hot smut can't get me hooked on a fandom.) And your site is the only one that I link for JE from my Love&War links page.

[elvinborn.livejournal.com]

this is really really good.
I loved it
I spent several hours that I didn't have to spend reading this. and I'm not at all repentant. Because this was really really good.

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much - and I hope I didn't keep you from anything important! :)

[katethegater.livejournal.com]

That was friggin' awesome!

I love AU's - Jack as a nurse was just classic!

Thanx Hun - Merry Christmas

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much.

Merry Christmas to you too.

[anr]

Wow. WOW. You know I love your writing, hon, but this blew me away. Seriously great stuff. I love your characterisations (in both realities), and the plot was stellar! Brava!

[venom69.livejournal.com]

Awww, thank you hon. *blush*

I'm very glad that you liked.